Leaves Falling Fast in Goldengrove


Many autumns ago, my cousin told me that her daughter had asked her, greatly upset, why all the trees were dying. Apparently, Gerard Manley Hopkins’ young friend asked him the same question.

Spring and Fall:
to a young child

Márgarét, áre you gríeving
Over Goldengrove unleaving?
Leáves like the things of man, you
With your fresh thoughts care for, can you?
Ah! ás the heart grows older
It will come to such sights colder
By and by, nor spare a sigh
Though worlds of wanwood leafmeal lie;
And yet you wíll weep and know why.
Now no matter, child, the name:
Sórrow’s spríngs áre the same.
Nor mouth had, no nor mind, expressed
What heart heard of, ghost guessed:
It ís the blight man was born for,
It is Margaret you mourn for.

Hopkins’ mind looked for the unifying principal of whatever he was examining, so “Sorrow’s springs are the same” is a key line leading to the poem’s conclusion.

FYI, “ghost”=spirit; “unleaving”=losing leaves.

Hopkins couldn’t find a publisher for this poem (written in 1880), although he had been published numerous times. “Spring and Fall” was not published until 1918, 29 years after his death. It’s a powerful work, but maybe it took the World War I generation to recognize it.


I’m taking part in Clarion West’s Write-a-thon starting today, and it goes for 6 weeks. My goal: I’ll be working on a YA novel, and trying to improve my skills in story development. You can see my profile here.

I also want to increase my daily word count, but I can only do that by getting better at knowing where a story is going.

Not to make this all about me, the Write-a-thon is Clarion West’s summer fundraiser. Roping in all these outsider writers makes the event a bit of a self-help experience for writers who are not part of the actual workshop, more fun and interesting than just handing over a donation.

And, in case you don’t know anything about Clarion West, it’s a writing program specifically for writers of science fiction and fantasy.

I’m crossing my fingers that the blog won’t be me talking to myself for the next 6 weeks, so I hope others will drop by and say hi. If you like, give your own thoughts about how you (if you are a writer) conceptualize and build a story from the starting idea. And if you are a reader rather than a writer, maybe you have thoughts on the genre, what you like, and what makes a weak, newly hatched idea gather its strength, spread its wings, and take wing.

Shipwreck — part 7

Jiro thought that he was fortunate in one respect: no one had actually seen him leave the house and take the direction that he had. Perhaps the villagers assumed he would take either of the ways along the coast. It was a steep, exhausting path, and he saw signs that it was used for woodcutting and other kinds of foraging. If the woman had told him the truth about how they traveled to the nearest town, the road where “people disappeared” would not be in favor. He was tired, hungry, wet… When no immediate pursuit came, his pace slackened to a weary trudge.

Finally, he had to admit that there was no path at all and when he came to a tree with an unusual fungus growing on it — that he had already seen and passed once, hours ago — he realized that he had walked in a great, exhausting circle. He was too disheartened to go further. What use to drive himself now? He did not even know where he was going, except that it was into wilderness where people disappeared. And no wonder. He flopped down under a dripping pine, leaned against the trunk, and went from resting to sleeping in a matter of minutes, exhaustion a substitute for a dry bed, comfort, and soft quilt.

It was not an easy sleep, however. He ran from demonic villagers with red-coal eyes, who carried forked spears and who were right on his heels, and he stumbled. Somehow, though, he didn’t die and found himself elsewhere, looking at a white fox with red ears and beautiful green eyes.

It sat looking back at him, with its soft plume tail curled around its forepaws, looking very self-possessed, and lowered its head courteously in greeting.

Jiro did the same.

“Allow me to introduce myself,” said the fox. “My name is First Dancer.”

Shipwreck — part 6

The village huddled on the last flat ground at the foot of a steep rise toward the mountains. Jiro found a path that led upward (to where, who knew?), climbed a short distance to a vantage where he could see the nearest houses, and watched.

He saw something move—away in the rain where one house was a gray half-real presence, a man darted quickly from one house to the next. Then, for a while, nothing. He continued to wait and watch. Finally, from this house, someone emerged. Then another, and another. Men and women, a group of at least a dozen, all holding oars, spears, and other objects that could be used as clubs. Jiro shrank behind his tree, and watched as they stealthily approached the house where he had been resting. Even the women! Yes, there among them was the woman who had given him the tea, and the warning, inadvertent though it had been. Run—no, wait.

The group made a rush to the door of the house and bunched up, all trying to get in.

Jiro took that moment as the best time to run.

Shipwreck — part 5

Could he wring any knowledge out of this woman without making them doubt his pose as an agent of the daimyo? He felt like he was traveling in the dark, afraid to kindle a light.

“Woman, how far is it to the closest town—where one would find trading establishments, or perhaps a government official in residence?” he asked.

She looked up at him for the barest instant, from her work of cutting up a fish, and then quickly dropped her gaze. “We go by boat to Tokushima. To walk takes two weeks, and many who walk disappear along the way.”

What was that look?

Jiro was so shocked by the woman’s expression that it was a moment before he could spare any thought on her words, which confirmed his worst fears. These people lived far from civilization. If he could have replicated that look, he would have used it for a demon-tengu character. There had been great feeling behind it, and fear was only part of it. Contempt? Maybe even… hatred.

She said nothing more, and the silence filled the small house. From outside came the sound of the rain. In the distance, he thought he heard a shout, but was not sure. Imagination, he told himself. You can hear all sorts of made-up sounds in falling water.

He was exhausted, and longed to take off his miserable, wet clothing, and lie down to sleep. But nagging in his mind was fear, fear of this demon-woman with the secrets behind her eyes, the hostility lurking under her obeisances.

“I must speak with the headman of your village,” said Jiro. “Go find him and bring him here.” He watched her intently.

She threw a handful of fish into the pot, bowed, and went out. Jiro exhaled a breath of relief. Just having her gone was an improvement. But there was an ominous quiet after the shout (that he had only imagined, he reminded himself). He went to the door and opened it partly, standing to the side and gazing out. There was no one visible. The rain fell and splashed on the ground. Jiro hugged his arms around him. Something urgent tugged at him. The woman was longer in returning than he expected. He opened the door wider and stepped out, then stepped back in and hesitated again. Finally, deciding at last, he snatched a wide straw hat from inside and went out, picking up a pair of shoes beside the door.

Shipwreck — part 4

“You must bear his body to a place where it is safe from the elements,” said Jiro. When no one moved, he kicked the man closest to him. “You! Is your village near here?”


“Then go quickly and come back with what is needed. The shipwreck is not to be touched except on my direction. Go!”

The man set off at a run.

Jiro stood watching him and wondered if he could keep these men in fear if he stopped giving them orders and gave them time to think. Why were they sneaking up on me? he thought. They mean harm; but why?

The intriguing little box he would have to examine later, in private. He tucked it securely into his obi. “Show me to your village,” he said to one of the remaining men. “And you—” (to the other one)—“wait here and make sure no harm comes to the body of the daimyo’s son.”

The first man rose to his feet and led the way, and Jiro followed.

As they came in sight of the village houses, they met the party going out to fetch the body. Jiro nodded to them, with cold hauteur, and passed on. He was ushered deferentially, even cringingly, out of the rain into a home where a terrified woman seated him in the guest’s place and served him tea, and began preparing some fish. It was a poor, threadbare place, this house—and the rest of the village had not promised any better.

He drank the tea, barely able to suppress a groan of relief, and wondered where he was.  The rain kept up a steady hissing on the thatch above and dripping onto the ground outside. He should have felt, would like to have felt, well, sheltered. But there was something about the woman that made him uneasy. She was afraid of him, yes. A peasant in a poor village would not look on a forced visit from a daimyo’s kin as a happy occasion, and death was always inauspicious. He would not have been troubled by that; it was natural and explainable. But there was a pall over the entire place, and this woman in particular he would swear had the same look of secret desperation as the men on the beach in that moment before they had dropped their weapons and abased themselves.

Who attacks a stranger upon sight? he wondered.

Shipwreck — part 3

Jiro looked up the beach in one direction, then in the other direction, and finally inland toward the forested hills. He decided to walk along the shoreline, and look for signs of human habitation rather than immediately striking inland.

Rain continued to pour down. He walked slowly. He founds bits of wreckage, but not much. All his belongings—all the costumes, makeup, props, and texts—gone. He found a ladle lying on the sand, and paused over it, studying it bitterly. Then he picked it up and flourished it. “You are the key to my new beginning,” he said, aloud. “Ladle, I will sell you in the market for one ryo, and buy a hook and line; I will catch fish and sell them for a ryo apiece until…”

He saw something ahead on the beach, and stopped. Then he walked slowly toward it.

It was a man, dead. Jiro touched him lightly, then turned the man’s face: it was Akihiko. Jiro had not known him before boarding the ship in Edo, but he had been an amiable companion during the voyage. He had said he was traveling to attend a wedding.

Jiro sighed and rocked back on his haunches. He could not do much for Akihiko, he decided. But he straightened him, placing him face up to look at heaven, and allowing the rain to wash his face free of sand and seaweed. As he composed Akihiko’s limbs in a more dignified posture, he noticed something inside his clothes around the waist, and this was revealed to be a small box about three inches square. The wedding present? There was a fastening around it…

As he straightened up, intending to examine the box more closely, he was startled by a movement out of the corner of his eye, and he turned around quickly—and found himself staring into the face of a man who had approached, but had given no hail, no greeting. In fact, he had been stealthy, and now betrayed alarm at being seen. The man was holding an oar, half-raised. Behind him came several other men, running, and each of them also carried some implement—one looked like a forked octopus spear.

“Dog!” cried Jiro. “Why do you approach me thus? Do you know who I am?”

The man’s eyes widened and his mouth dropped slightly open. He took a step back, in an involuntary reaction.

Jiro realized that he had startled but not quite convinced. Suspicion had to be choked off before the man realized it was there. He planted his legs and shoved his face out toward the man wearing what he knew was a horrible look of barely suppressed rage. (He had seen it on Lord Hideyoshi’s face and had afterward practiced it until he had it right, once he had gotten over the shock it had given him.) He gestured towards Akihiko, and bellowed, “This is the daimyo’s son—dead!”

An appalling look of fear took over the man’s face. He almost seemed to melt. He dropped the oar, went to his knees and prostrated himself. Jiro heard muffled words, of which he could only make out “Please.” The other two men also fell to the sand.



Shipwreck — part 2

Rocks and sand. Jiro flexed his hand, wondered why he felt grit under it, and coughed. He was seized by a spasm of coughing then, and rolled onto his side.

Apparently he was alive. The sea surged up the beach and washed around his waist, and receded. Sudden fear of a great wave that could pull him back to death make him push himself upright. He felt weak and dizzy, and he started crawling. When he came to a strip of large rocks and sea litter, he stopped and rested against a rock. He still felt breathless. Another fit of coughing took him, and left him too exhausted to move.

Rain was pouring down on him. For a long time he huddled there, piecing together fragments of present and past. The water: the deep, cold, infinite water. The rain, in contrast, felt warm.

The ship, of course, was gone. He remembered the terrible shudder, the pitch of the deck, and the shock of the water. He heard the cries of the men who fell into the water with him. He remembered the brief struggle for air and life, and the confused tumble in the storm-driven sea.

A wave washed over his legs, and he raised his head in panic. Get to land, he told himself. Out of the sea. On high land. Why don’t you move?

He pushed himself up, and waded heavily through the foaming surf.


And then he stood on shore, facing green forested hills inland. In the wind and torrential rain, they were a restless green blur. He became more aware of his condition. His kimono clung around his waist, twisted and uncomfortable, and his upper torso was bare. His shoes were gone. Absurdly, he straightened his clothes and pushed his hair back.

He saw no one else. Something lay on the beach. When he walked closer, he saw it was a tangle of sail and lines. He looked back out to sea, and shook his fist. “Susano-o!” he shouted, and then coughed and began again. “Susano-o! I curse you if you wrecked our ship!” He considered. “And if you saved me, then I add my thanks!”

And then he jumped up into the air and made a gesture of defiance. On stage, it always earned huge laughter. Here was silence. But it did make him feel a little better. “Ha!” he added.

Shipwreck — part 1

Tan-tan. Let the tale be told, honestly and artfully, to delight and enlighten those who were not there. Inari, mistress and master, lend  your servant the best words to tell the tale of how a wrong was righted, how an unhappy ghost found peace, how three lowly creatures achieved greatness, and how an actor lost everything and found something else. Begin: I see a storm approaching. Tan-tan.

Jiro and Akihiko were sitting on the ship’s deck, out of the way of the sailors, playing cho-han, as they had done every day since they had sailed from Edo. Jiro shook the dice and turned the cup over, revealing that he had lost his bet. Akihiko smiled.

Jiro had lost all the money he had won over the past two days.

This, however, was merely a sign that the dice were about to start falling in his favor again.  He handed the cup to Akihiko, who dropped the dice in and gave them a shake.

A sailor shouted, and they looked up. A wall of black cloud had appeared on the horizon, and as they watched, an outrider gust of wind raced across the water, and threw spray in their faces. The ship trembled.

“I cannot be delayed,” said Akihiko. “I must deliver the gift in time.”

“Are you telling this to the storm?” said Jiro. He had a feeling of dread, and suspected that this was the culmination of his life’s misfortunes, the final event that would make all else of no consequence.

The ship’s crew were furling sails and crying prayers. Another gust hit the ship.

“No!” Akihiko protested. “I am trusted with this… I cannot fail! The gift!” He looked at Jiro, as though his companion could supply an escape.

Jiro watched the blackness, driving toward them like avenging fury. He had already endured the wrath of Lord Hideyoshi, which had led to banishment; but this power was beyond all entreaty. Fear urged him to run, but there was nowhere to go. He decided to face his doom right where he was. In the wind’s roar, he barely heard Akihiko, saying something — no, shouting — about the wedding present. And then the great fist struck them.